Tension is high.
A signal gun shot breaks the silence.
A sudden burst of cheering.
Students bolting like there lives are depending on it.
The finish line is two steps away.
The last bit of energy drains out of them as they cross the finish line.
A sigh of satisfaction rumbles round the field as the race finishes
Silence once again...
These arcs the sounds of H.N.I athletics day
I love how you are forcing the reader to pause and think...the strong short sentences and lovely descriptive words. Well done! Can you spot the typo...
ReplyDeleteKarmi, this is absolutely fantastic! Great choice of words and fantabulous final sentence. Keep on making these faboulous stories and you will beat all them fantastic poets to the top! Though, the typo is minor, lets play Spot The Typo!
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